первый стих. можно немножко вашего мнения?
попрошу не критиковать за относительно неширокий словарный запас, я ж всё таки не носитель языка) пока только совершенствуюсь:)
и ещё вот один момент меня напрягает: правильно ли было сказать "waves on sea"?
far beyond the waves on sea
far beyond the ground
the greatest treasure of our land
was magically found
a chest fulfilled with will and hope,
eternal love and faith
a chest with care, pure kindness
and tolerance and grace
there was no bottom in the chest;
enough for humankind
so everyone on planet Earth
had something good to find
here every single person got
a piece of happiness
and seven hundred grams of juice
no more, no less
the wind was playing with the hair
the sun was shining high
there was no trace of hatred left
there never was a fight
...far beyond the waves on sea,
far beyond the ground
on a lone cliff in the moutains,
where no one is around
the greates treasure of our land
is found by a man
a treasure, that can not be lost
or buried in sand
his soul, fulfilled with will and hope
eternal love and faith
his soul, his care and kindness
and tolerance and grace.
и ещё вот один момент меня напрягает: правильно ли было сказать "waves on sea"?
far beyond the waves on sea
far beyond the ground
the greatest treasure of our land
was magically found
a chest fulfilled with will and hope,
eternal love and faith
a chest with care, pure kindness
and tolerance and grace
there was no bottom in the chest;
enough for humankind
so everyone on planet Earth
had something good to find
here every single person got
a piece of happiness
and seven hundred grams of juice
no more, no less
the wind was playing with the hair
the sun was shining high
there was no trace of hatred left
there never was a fight
...far beyond the waves on sea,
far beyond the ground
on a lone cliff in the moutains,
where no one is around
the greates treasure of our land
is found by a man
a treasure, that can not be lost
or buried in sand
his soul, fulfilled with will and hope
eternal love and faith
his soul, his care and kindness
and tolerance and grace.